For my second draft, I wanted to make some edits to make my graphic more impactful and strong. The strongest point I took in consideration from critique and suggestions was that the women depicted were too traditionally feminine for the message I'm trying to portray. 

I ensured that these women portrayed more masculine and unconventionally 'feminine' traits (according to mainstream advertising and media), representing the huge group of queer women being misrepresented / completely ignored by advertisers. Also for this version of my concept, I wanted to take more of a play on the term 'lipstick lesbian', therefore having the woman on the right putting on lipstick, with kiss marks on the other woman.

I also added a pop of colour for the lipstick to ensure it stood out and was clear, and kept the rest black & white. I also kept the sketchy/rough style as it was received well by my tutor and classmates.